Thinking by Sarah Healy
Thinking. Can't stop thinking.
Think of you. This. That. That Life. That day.
That dream was mine.
A utopian dream.
Your aura; struck me like lightning to a tree.
Pointy, like a star, you shone.
So bright, yet not shining as a star would,
But as apparent as white chalk on a blackboard.
You would not show off like a star.
Yet you did burn so hot, so fiercely, so explosively -
you were a star in my eyes.
But like all stars, you died.
That gas was gone.
No pull between us.
The atmosphere was dry
and I began to choke.
I was taken from my star - like a child being taken from its poor,
drunken mother - I did not know what was happening.
Dazed. Confused. Without true reality, I there sat.
Wondering.
The end of my world had only just begun, with yours beginning.
Think of you. This. That. That Life. That day.
That dream was mine.
A utopian dream.
Your aura; struck me like lightning to a tree.
Pointy, like a star, you shone.
So bright, yet not shining as a star would,
But as apparent as white chalk on a blackboard.
You would not show off like a star.
Yet you did burn so hot, so fiercely, so explosively -
you were a star in my eyes.
But like all stars, you died.
That gas was gone.
No pull between us.
The atmosphere was dry
and I began to choke.
I was taken from my star - like a child being taken from its poor,
drunken mother - I did not know what was happening.
Dazed. Confused. Without true reality, I there sat.
Wondering.
The end of my world had only just begun, with yours beginning.
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My poem is about holding people back. I held back a past love, and therefore, I lost him.
But even though we lose someone, it doesn't mean they can't be in our thoughts.
But even though we lose someone, it doesn't mean they can't be in our thoughts.
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Hi I'm flo from Germany. and I voted for this poem because I meet a girl for several years and we got a lot in common. I liked her and she liked me. But after a few of moths I did a stupid mistake. I will never see her again (she still alive, don't worry). And I fell like the person who is left alone in life. And I think my story is reflected in this poem. sorry for my bad english. :) - Florian |
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it moved me. very nice. deep - Lisa |
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The verse "your aura; struck me like lightening to a tree" was incredible, the intensity, I'll never forget that verse. - Lou |
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this poem was one of those poems that are seldome found. Those rare words that reach down into your soul and gives you a feeling you can only get from a poem such as this. Thank you. - Bethany |
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the poem was very nice and sad - karina |
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i think this poem is awesome. it really touched me. - sharon |
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It is a wonderful poem. It reminds me how painful is to lose someone and know that you'll probably never see her again. - Antonis |
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this was how i felt when he left me. reading this made me know that i'm not alone. thank you. - Claire |
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The idea and theme is very nice - Jan |
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I really did like this poem, it reminded me of someone. Thanks. - Mike |
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It touched my heart in a way i can describe though you said how i felt in your poem about what is going on in my life thank you - Jewel |
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The poem is written very well. It reminds me of a past experience and it states exactly how i felt and exactly the same situation. - laura |
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this poem is full of emotions and they are truly told/shown - mel114 |
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I JUST LOVE YOUR POEM MAKES ME THINK AND REMEMBER WHAT MY LOVE FOR SOMEONE DID. - LORENA |
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I felt the pain of loss and longing in this. sometimes the switch is stuck on. - Brian |
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this poem is really good because people feel like that some times when there sad. - sonia |
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its just amazing how she`d written such a poem.... you are a relly gifted heart-expresser! nice one! ope to know you more! - mimi |
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This is really a great poem, I love it, keep writing. - Rafia |
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I liked your poem a lot, cause i cant either stop thinking. thinking about what had happend about what could happen too many thinks are on my mind. He is just telling me that he needs a space and after that it all will be fine as it was before. I cant stop thinking.(sorry for mistakes im german) - Nadine |
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nice poem, I like the pace of it - Bob |
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Your imagination preceeds you, yet I feel that the 2nd verse of this poem could go into another direction, but ending up with the same last line. - Chrissy |
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beautiful poem. i can relate to it alot, and i never stop thinking. you have a great talent. keep writting, and i'll keep reading them. good luck for the future! - Angel |
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Its great. Youve got talent. I just got out of a realtionship and it helped. It gave me some things to think about. - Snipe |
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Your poem is very touching to me, especially your last line. - Shannon |
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I really like your poem. It,s like you know the pain i have innside me. Thank you. - jose |
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I find this poem very sweet. I mean, it expresses alot of emotions people actually feel. i know this because i gone through this. well that's all i've got to say. - Jenny |
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Really great comment. The imagery, i could almost imagine how she felt. Keep it up. - Karen |
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ur poem touched me and made me think of some things that im going through. - amber |
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You're great. I have felt this before. - July |
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this peom is exactly what happened between me and my ex boyfriend.it really hit hard to my heart - sara |
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I am having the same feeling about this poem and it make me feel like the person was talking about my feelings. - sundy |
