Deceiving Me by Erin Howley
When I said I loved you,
It was a lie.
Lust is what
I felt inside.
I'm still wondering
what love is,
This couldn't have been it,
it wasn't all bliss.
We definitely wouldn't
be good together;
The two of us mixing
was like bad weather.
You were snow,
and I was the sun.
The task of staying together
could never be done.
If I say this over and over,
maybe I'll believe.
I'll get out of this okay,
if I can deceive me.
It was a lie.
Lust is what
I felt inside.
I'm still wondering
what love is,
This couldn't have been it,
it wasn't all bliss.
We definitely wouldn't
be good together;
The two of us mixing
was like bad weather.
You were snow,
and I was the sun.
The task of staying together
could never be done.
If I say this over and over,
maybe I'll believe.
I'll get out of this okay,
if I can deceive me.
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I wrote this one night while I was trying to lie to myself. I tried to say that this person had meant nothing to me - a vain attempt to get over my broken heart.
We were actually perfect for each other, but I wanted nothing more than to mend my own heart in the quickest way possible. He was the first person I have ever loved and it hurt when I still loved him, but he no longer had the same feelings for me.
We were actually perfect for each other, but I wanted nothing more than to mend my own heart in the quickest way possible. He was the first person I have ever loved and it hurt when I still loved him, but he no longer had the same feelings for me.
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Wow, this is a great poem. So many of us dont want to feel this pain, so we deny it and lie to every1 including ourselves. You brought the feeling to life with your poem, thanx. You should be proud of yourself and your work. Keep it up. God Bless. - Amanda |
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this poem was said in a way that i could relate with if i were to scale this from 1-10 i would scale it with a 8 - 2way |
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Very good. It was touching. It really makes ya think. I have tried to decieve myself many times but honestly i don't think it can be done the heart is stronger than the brain in my personal opinion. Very good writing - caitlin |
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This poem touches the feeling of love I have for a person who doesn't seem to feel the same way back. So I think this poem is one of the best I ever read before. - Angel |
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Hey i thought this was a pretty good poem keep up the good work and i just also wanted to let you know that this poem helped me get threw a relationship which i was sun and he was snow and it could never be so we split and this was exactly how i felt and thanks for that help amy - Amy |
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I really loved this poem. Its how i felt and still fell. thank u for showing me the way - red |
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This poem reminds me of what I once said to a guy that I said I love you too. It really brought a smile to my face - Nick |
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i give this poem a nine out of ten because i can relate to what the pot was talking about and i feel like its a really emotional poem that alot of people go through. - larissa |
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I am so glad I read that poem. I used to lie to myself all the time. I told a boy I didn't love that I loved him, and the worst part was I believed it. After reading this poem, I now know that it was a lie. A way to get myself out of a situation I'm going through. pregnancy. Teen pregnancy. But now I know that the father of my future baby I do not love. I will be fine. At least I know the truth. And that, I believe, is always the first step. Thank you. - sara |
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GREAT poem. bravo. i know i would be the same way. - Lauren |
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i can relate to it. - renae |
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i think that this was a great poem, i really loved your astrolgy that you used Ex. ( snow and sun ) sincerealy, jesse - Jelvisc |
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This was a great poem. I can relate to nit because I am going through it right now. The guy I love is now ignoring me and I act like I don't care but I love him so much. - Vanessa |
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The reason why I liked this poem because I went throught the same thing with my ex. I tryed to act like he meant nothing when I really still loved him and needed him alot. So this poems reminded me of what I once had. - Keara |
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wow this poem makes feel like im with my ex again. I loved it keep up the good work your truly awesome at writing poems! - whitney |
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This is a great poem Erin, i know exactly how you feel! it's the same with me and my x but now i'm better, you're a great girl and i hope your all better now. keep it up! - Kriz |
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Good Peom. I loved it. - Desiree |
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I just love your poem soooooo much. I can relate to it in so many different ways. - Hayley |
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I like your poem i know where you are comeing from - ashley |
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This poem descibe of what I feel about my x. great poem! - J |
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Hey, excellent poem. This poem made me realize that love sometimes really isn't love. It's only lust, and this poem makes me wonder how my girlfriend really feels about me. Keep writing, and I'll be sure to show it to her to find out. If tings don't go the right way. hey I'll live right? Keep writing. - Mark |
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ok, this poem is alright. i wouldnt say that its the best that i've read BUT it really reminds me of someone. but, hey keep up the good work - just |
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I`m feelin the same thing! This boy and me was talkin he told me that he loved me and that we should be together but the whole time he was just saying that than I found out he was talking to my Friend!Thank u soo much this made me feel soooo muche better! - Ashley |
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This was a great poem. My boyfriend of 3 months just broke up with me because of another girl. I just laugh to all of my friends and say its no big deal. when all i wanna do is die. Thank you, this helped. - Bre |
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i thought that this was a really good poem! - cris |
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what an amazing poem, it expressed exactly what i was feeling about a past boyfriend i just cant seem to get over. - seren |
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Erin, I thought your poem was awesome. I have been through the EXACT thing! I am 16, and when I found out that the "love of my life" was talking to another girl. I spent a whole MONTH telling myself and others that it wasn't a big deal, and I really didn't care. Keep writing girl! - Adrienne |
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it made my heart stop because im goin through the same thing, except i could never put it in to words, thanks - Jen |
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This is a great idea for a poem! Sometimes we try to find things in a relationship (or potential relationship) that aren't there in order to justify not letting go, and your way of saying it was quite eloquent. Good job. - Heather |
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This was an excellent poem young jedi! I could totally relate! oh my gosh! could i ever! If only i had found the poem about 2 weeks ago when I was feeling it the most! but I'm better now! and I hope you are to! Good job! - Steph |
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I have been the same way. I thought that I loved this boy but, I didn't it was really all lust. - Krystal |
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this poem touched me , and it was greatly written - kacie |
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I loved the poem, I know exactly what your saying, NICE JOB! - Drie |
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that is exactly what me and my ex boyfriend are like. we fought lots, more than any other couple we knew. we were both unhappy, we just didn't really know it. it was only lust, and it ended like that. - Karyn |
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It really has a meaning & I'm sure we've all felt it once. - Natalie |
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I really liked your poem. It really got to me even though I had to read it twice to make sure I interpreted it right. Keep writing, you are a very good poet. - Wendy |
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Hey this poem is tight! It took me a minute but when i got it was awesome. I really can relate! - Kristina |
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This is a great poem. Its how i feel for my ex i try to tell myself everyday the same this you say in this poem. - Tara |
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I really like your poem, and I could relate completely. I liked the ending line the most. - Aly |
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I really enjoyed your poem and in a way I can relate back to a time that I tried to do something similar. Thanks. - ASHLEY |
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It took me a second to get what it was you were saying, but when I did, I was quite impressed with the last couple lines - joe |
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i just want to say, that if erin wrote this poem from personal experience,i feel so sorry for her because i feel or am feeling the same.and i know how much it hurts to be decieved.good luck erin, you are a bueatiful poet - kate |
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That was really good. Plus you have a good name too! - Erin |
