His Paradise by Amanda D Besserer
Bring me to his paradise
a feeling of within,
naked to his loving eyes
caressing me with sin
I long to feel his softest kiss
upon my dampened skin
Bring me to his paradise,
and let our bodies meet
the trickle of the rain outside
would shower us with heat,
I wish to be his fantasy
and make our love complete.
a feeling of within,
naked to his loving eyes
caressing me with sin
I long to feel his softest kiss
upon my dampened skin
Bring me to his paradise,
and let our bodies meet
the trickle of the rain outside
would shower us with heat,
I wish to be his fantasy
and make our love complete.
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This poem describes the true feelings of people who love each other so much that they are willing to give the ultimate gift. This poem is dedicated to my one true love, my muse, my soul mate.
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THAT IS SO BEAUTIFUL I AM CRYING AFTER READING IT IT IS JUS WONDERFUL YOU DO IT - ANNET |
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that poem was really good you obviously gave it alot of thought and in a way i can relate to it so don't stop, your poetry can take you far i know because it did it for me - Mandy |
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VERRY NICE POEM. WELL DONE JOB KEEP UP! - salome |
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keep up the good work. - inita |
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I really liked your poem.It was short and simple but right to the point - ChArLEnE |
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very beautriful poem, would love to hear the story that inspired it - jeannie |
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Very Good Poem..Very Nice work.. - Jennifer |
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This poem was soo simply romantic..reminds me of a long distance yearning for love..beautiful - Jen |
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I enjoyed this poem very much. It explains how alot of feel inside. - rangle1 |
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GReat poem - Misty |
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I Love it,it says so much in so many ways. - Stephanie |
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now that was hot - Kate |
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It was really great! Keep um coming - Ashley |
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Just wanna say great poem,it rocks! like so many in here that lag in imagination..yers stands out! - David |
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NNiiccee! - Leighe |
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wow! a really good poem. It's deep, touching, perfect. I give it a 10. (*_~) - Martha |
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I love it. It was short and sweet. - Precious |
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A wonderful depiction of the endless human struggle to surrender to love. - Violetz |
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Lovely - BDA |
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I wish to be his fantasy too, but know it cannot be. - Susan |
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The use of aliteration would have created a prolotariate feeling to your poem. Thus the emphasis would have been on a confrontation of love and not a metamorphic reaction, but i am impressed - Dr |
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Quiite moving - Cindy |
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That not a bad poem keep writing - Dustin |
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simple way to describe true love - Mariann |
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this poem is the best of the best - Sylvin |
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Girl, that was the bomb!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! - Tiffany |
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that was awesome! - Lindsay |
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I just would say I know how she is feeling in this and it is completely beautiful to want to give your all to be complete in osmeone else world of lust and love and passion. I like all the words that she chose. - kanisha |
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Beautifully said... - Lyn |
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Hits the spot - mark |
