Blind by Mitchell Pavao
Your beauty intoxicates all you encounter,
Yet you fail to notice,
This is your blunder,
You've had a rough time,
Though now it is over,
But yet you continue clinging to what is left over,
And in doing this your depression grows deeper,
Pulling you apart at the seams,
Causing you to unravel and fall to you knees,
Pondering desperately: "How much worse can it be? "
To ease your mind of your terrible burden,
You bargain with Satan (as if he cares),
Giving you a release, in turn for your soul:
That you believe tarnished and not worth much at all,
When all of your friends have been with you till now,
But here comes the crossroads up ahead,
They give you a choice: "Stand tall or fall down."
You have your beauty and charm,
Your intelligence and grace,
Good friends and your health,
What more does it take for you?
Yet you fail to notice,
This is your blunder,
You've had a rough time,
Though now it is over,
But yet you continue clinging to what is left over,
And in doing this your depression grows deeper,
Pulling you apart at the seams,
Causing you to unravel and fall to you knees,
Pondering desperately: "How much worse can it be? "
To ease your mind of your terrible burden,
You bargain with Satan (as if he cares),
Giving you a release, in turn for your soul:
That you believe tarnished and not worth much at all,
When all of your friends have been with you till now,
But here comes the crossroads up ahead,
They give you a choice: "Stand tall or fall down."
You have your beauty and charm,
Your intelligence and grace,
Good friends and your health,
What more does it take for you?
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This is about a friend that was depressed about her break up with her ex boyfriend. She turned to smoking and stuff for relief. I did my best to help her
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this poem is a fact of reality everybody loves you until you go nuts then your just that person i used to no! - grainne |
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many people cling to the past But they must remember true love would last live for the good times and have a blast this poem is an excellent one and the girl is lucky - samantha |
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It me at home, i was just dumped from a man i truly beleved cared now every thing hurts and nothing is clear, what a moving poem - Erin |
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Thank you! I have been trying to put into words how it is to sit and watch a friend go through this, and you nailed it. - Shannel |
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it was really good. i liked it alot. keep writting. - amber |
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You done good on this pome I will be looking fore more like it - Tony |
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beautiful that is great i totally belive in what your sayin i know a lot of people feel self pity and i understand that once upon a time something hurt them but they have more going for them than they realise and that is like that with a load of my mates i just wish the'd stop going on a bout there pain of there dead goldfish gerri,or there heartache over brad pitt grrrrr well anyway your poem is great keep up writing and become famous cos i would sooooooooo buy you work if you published it! its great! - Naomi |
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ey dat was good n im sry bout ur friend it must be hard. i hope she feels better - ilona |
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i can so realate to this and the poem was just great. my ex gave me pain and i cant deal with it but i try and im glad u did. - kayla |
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Thanks to everyone for the kind words. - Mitchell |
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your poem is great and really well written, it describes how you feel and it does it well. this is a very good poem continue to write and inspire others - hurting |
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i like this poem because u try n understand the depth of ur friend and how hard depression really is - jessica |
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hey i like ur poem it was very good keep it up - kyle |
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ur poem was touching and very true it's seen alot and no one ever seems to notice its good that u do. - rachel |
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I suffer from depression and this poem really spoke to me and made me realize what I have and makes me feel 100X better about myself. - Mike |
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i love this poem. it's creative and people can really relate to it! - donsurae |
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this is a very moving poem because i know what the writers going through. - jake |
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I loved this poem. It is what is going on with my friend I will send her this poem and maybe she'll stop smoking and doing drugs. I thaught this poem was marvulius it was more than I could put in words. - Sonia |
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i really could relae to that poem. 2 thumbs up - teresa |
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this poem really touches me beacause it describes how i feel . just to let you know you have touched somebody - anthony |
