Darkness by Emily
I'm swimming all alone in a pool of darkness
and I feel like darkness is slowly pulling me under
I yell for help but no one is there to hear it
I begin to see the water at eye level
and I kick and flail
fighting to stay above the darkness
But the darkness won't let go of its hold on me
and I slowly begin to give in
to the feeling that lies below the water line
the waters starts to fill my lungs
the lungs that once held so much life
yet now they allow the murky water to replace that
I know that this path doesn't lead to happiness
But why doesn't someone grab my hand
pull me from darkness's grasp?
because no one knows I stand at the boundary
the boundary between light and dark
so I give in to the thing that holds me
All of the strength and all of the courage
that I once held in my heart
can't save me from the water
So I slowly slip below the world of conscientiousness
undetected by the occupants of that world
I don't want to fight anymore
I've given into darkness
and I feel like darkness is slowly pulling me under
I yell for help but no one is there to hear it
I begin to see the water at eye level
and I kick and flail
fighting to stay above the darkness
But the darkness won't let go of its hold on me
and I slowly begin to give in
to the feeling that lies below the water line
the waters starts to fill my lungs
the lungs that once held so much life
yet now they allow the murky water to replace that
I know that this path doesn't lead to happiness
But why doesn't someone grab my hand
pull me from darkness's grasp?
because no one knows I stand at the boundary
the boundary between light and dark
so I give in to the thing that holds me
All of the strength and all of the courage
that I once held in my heart
can't save me from the water
So I slowly slip below the world of conscientiousness
undetected by the occupants of that world
I don't want to fight anymore
I've given into darkness
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Rating: B |
Lately, I had been feelings like the outsider among my friends and I felt like no one really understood me and knew what was going on in my head.
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Emily . you have written what I have felt for a very long time. I suffer from major depression and am on the brink of suicide all the time. While your poen is filled with fear, it is sending me a message of warmth, somehow I know that the darkness will one day bring me peace. Thank you. - Fred |
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I feel ezcatly like this! ita like everyone just ignores me whenever i need them and i dont know why! i dont want to keep fighting if theres no point! if nobody cares why should i try to get out of the water? - holly |
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this poem describes how i feel right about now. i would say its a good poem but it's sad and it makes me want to cry. so i guess it's great for what the author was trying to say. - Becca |
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its like you took the words in my mind and wrote them all down in one poem. such truth. - shauna |
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Hey that poem of urs is top grade, it describes how i feel most of the time, its like u know how to put sumthin as despressin as depression and put it into a truly beautiful poem. never quit writing emily u have a true gift u have made my day and given me some hope thanks - Franko |
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i loved the poem i can really relate to it, its sad how people can be giving out so many signs and know one notices how much that person needs help - Yanana |
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***** I love it! And that's all i have to say. Your not alone - Drowning |
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This poem is exactly how i feel. It's like no one hears your pain and your pain is shouting out so loud you think the world will go deth. No one sees your pain and your practicly on the floor bleeding to death - Corrina |
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Wow, that's the exact way I'm feeling. I think reading this just gave me a ray of hope that someone's going through the same thing I am - Ashley-Rose |
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all of these poems are brillant and support they people who feel like this to know they are not alone. - samantha |
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emily thank-you so much for writing that. THANK-YOU xx - sam |
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I absolutly loved your poem. I felt as though I was losing myself in your words. - Jessica |
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i love this poem. this is exactly how i feel rite now. exactly. there is no point waiting for something tht will never happen, hoping for somethin tht will never happen. - saj |
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This is the Darkest thing I have ever read. And its sweet. I give it an 10 out of 10 - sam |
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it was a great poem i epecially like the way you have shown how some people feel has though they are litterally getting dragged down into hatred and lonliness. - steve |
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I really liked this poem it relates to alot of young people that want to scream for help but dont know how to. I read alot of poems and this is one of the best. - Jeanette |
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The imagery in this poem was so perfect for describing the feelings that happen with depression. Great job captivating them! - Julie |
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so true i live this every day - ashley |
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omg! i love your poem it really touched my heart and if it touched one heart it will touch anyones heart. omg keep writting poems! this is WAAAY better then any poem i hav even wrote! your doing great! -Alissa - alissa |
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i can understand that feeling so id vote a 9 out of 10. - shadow5660 |
