Betrayal by Dan McDonald
An echo fades into the night,
an eerie mournful sound.
A shooting star disappears from sight,
and I crumble to the ground.
There is no life within this garden;
my sobs are the only sound.
I have poisoned the honeyed fountain
where your love could be found.
Dazed, I stare at the stars above,
my grieving howls fill the night!
Unintended betrayal of love
has hidden you from my sight.
I remember how it used to be
when we shared our fears and delights.
You are a treasured friend to me.
How can I make things right?
Feeling afraid, cold and lonely,
I long to tell you how I feel,
but you dont want to hear me.
The pain for you is much too real.
Should I back away and build a wall
and block away how I feel?
Or, should I give you a call?
We both need some time to heal.
An echo fades into the night
as our friendship disappears.
How do I know what is right?
How can I ease my fears?
If I do call you again,
would the old wounds reappear?
I cant stand to cause you pain.
Hurting you again is my worst fear!
an eerie mournful sound.
A shooting star disappears from sight,
and I crumble to the ground.
There is no life within this garden;
my sobs are the only sound.
I have poisoned the honeyed fountain
where your love could be found.
Dazed, I stare at the stars above,
my grieving howls fill the night!
Unintended betrayal of love
has hidden you from my sight.
I remember how it used to be
when we shared our fears and delights.
You are a treasured friend to me.
How can I make things right?
Feeling afraid, cold and lonely,
I long to tell you how I feel,
but you dont want to hear me.
The pain for you is much too real.
Should I back away and build a wall
and block away how I feel?
Or, should I give you a call?
We both need some time to heal.
An echo fades into the night
as our friendship disappears.
How do I know what is right?
How can I ease my fears?
If I do call you again,
would the old wounds reappear?
I cant stand to cause you pain.
Hurting you again is my worst fear!
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Rating: N/A |
Betrayal of a friend's feelings, whether intentional or not, can rip friendship apart, and leave both feeling empty. I hurt someone I care about very much, and the pain was too great for her to bear. Her friendship is like a shooting star flaring briefly across the heavens, a moment in time that I will treasure forever. Maybe, with time, the garden where our friendship grew will blossom again. Do I respect her wishes and never talk to her again, or do I try to make things right? I dont know. Until I figure that out, this poem is my emotional release.
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this poem is beautifully sad, and i understand how true it is. - lily |
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i would never send this to any of myk friends b/c they seem to be the only backstabbing people around me. is that what friends are really for?!?! - Leigha |
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i guess am voting becouse once i had the same problem,raeding this poem made me feel. well,a very strange feeling. each word remindes me of my past. about me and my old friend and how we used to be. so happy. so friends. and it also remindes me how we became apart. cause of my stupid,couse i didn't call her number. and i watched our friendship fade away - madline |
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This is an Awsome poem. - Patrick |
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this poem was really good for a one to ten i would give it an eight - Misty |
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i think that this poem is very good for friends who betrayed each other for a very long time. - Joei |
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i just lost my bestfriend and i didnt want it to end but it did and your poem really touched me. - christina |
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Well said. Wish I could express myself that well - David |
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I can;t believe that the feelings that I ahave trapped inside of me cxould be put into words so beatifully. Thank you for setting me free. - Maggie |
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I have just lost my best friend because I was falling in love with her. - Stuart |
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10 is my rank to your poem, i feel betrayed because of my best friend. i thought im lucky because i knew she was there beside. but she lied to me. i trusted her so much. so this pain would kill me now. i dont know, what will i going to do. - cheradee |
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it was a very nice poem. i think many people can relate to your poem. Good job. - Natalie |
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I love this poem! It reminds me of things iw ent through! or am going through! - Jessica |
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this was a real well written poem. u put across wat i wanted to say thank u - meghaa |
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this poem really touched me, you spoke all my feelings with four verses! my mate and i arn't talking at the moment and this has really helped me put things in perspective. thankyou! - evie |
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I love this poem! I feel it really toched me. Good job! - Amber |
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I kindda going through the same pain and when I read this poem it helps me ease the pain. Please keep writing these wonderful poems. thanks - Sunita |
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your poem was really good and i enjoyed it alot! - Brittany |
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This poem is awesome. My friend and me really need some time to heal up . Your poem encouraged me that there could still be life. Thank you so much! - Shreyasi |
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this song truely touched me cuz of the fact that i jsut lost a really good friend and that all my friends are leaving me for there boyfirends and it is jsut really depresing me to a maximmum extent. they have been my friedns forever and they just ditch me so ya ur poem is a really great peom and it is like talking about every1s life that has been hurt by a freind. - Trevor |
