Needs by Ron Carnell
When I'm hungry
I eat.
When I'm thirsty
I drink.
When I'm tired
I sleep.
But there's an
Empty Void
In my soul that
Only you can fill.
I eat, I drink, I sleep.
I exist.
But I live only because
You allow it.
I eat.
When I'm thirsty
I drink.
When I'm tired
I sleep.
But there's an
Empty Void
In my soul that
Only you can fill.
I eat, I drink, I sleep.
I exist.
But I live only because
You allow it.
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While free-form verse isn't usually my style, I think it was the only possible choice for what I wanted to say in this poem. Rhyme and metrics would only have detracted from the meaning.
My message came from a very sudden realization one day that all human beings - including myself - were driven almost entirely by some pretty basic needs. Only when those needs are realized can we move forward, to perhaps discover more profound and meaningful needs.
And when I started itemizing what I thought those needs might be, I came up with this:
My message came from a very sudden realization one day that all human beings - including myself - were driven almost entirely by some pretty basic needs. Only when those needs are realized can we move forward, to perhaps discover more profound and meaningful needs.
And when I started itemizing what I thought those needs might be, I came up with this:
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this poem was so freakin awesome it was short yet said so much i really loved it i am a huge poetry fan and again VERY good job! - darlene |
